Merge pull request #63779 from zdover23/wip-doc-2025-06-06-mgr-telemetry-63735-followup

doc/mgr: edit telemetry.rst

Reviewed-by: Anthony D'Atri <anthony.datri@gmail.com>

diff --cc doc/mgr/telemetry.rst
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--- 1/doc/mgr/telemetry.rst
--- 2/doc/mgr/telemetry.rst
+++ b/doc/mgr/telemetry.rst
@@@ -60,12 -60,12 +60,12 @@@ reported data does not include pool nam
  hostnames, or device serial numbers.
  
  The reported data contains counters and statistics pertaining to how the
- cluster has been deployed, the version of Ceph, the distribution of the hosts,
- and other parameters that help the project develop a better understanding of
- the way Ceph is used.
+ cluster has been deployed, the version of Ceph, the OS distribution, and other
+ parameters that help the project develop a better understanding of the way Ceph
+ is used.
  
  Data is sent secured to
 -`https://telemetry.ceph.com<https://telemetry.ceph.com>`_.
 +`https://telemetry.ceph.com <https://telemetry.ceph.com>`_.
  
  Individual channels can be enabled or disabled by running the following
  commands: